Many people prefer to spend the money they get rather than save it for their future. What are the reasons? Is this positive or negative development?
Firstly
, we have two types of people the first type
being the spender
and the second type
being the saver
type
. I would like to start with the first type
which is the spender
I see what makes this
type
spend more than actually save the money
they have this
kind of mindset I would call it YOLO which stands for you only live once those type
of people have no fear just because they are scared of missing the freedom of living they don'Fix the agreement mistake
types
t
want to die without doing something kind of scary or risky or fun they want to simply live in the moment. The second type
which is the saver
this
type
is really different than
the Change the preposition
from
spender
as we said the spender
has the YOLO mindset, in the other hand the saver
is more scared to do risky stuff or risky spending mainly scared of regret the idea of maybe later on in life I would have needed that money
or oh I wish I didn't
spend that money
on those dumb things. Hence
, not all the saver
type
think in that way Fix the agreement mistake
types
that is
just the unhealthy ones. Lastly
, I think balance is the key , you can't
keep spending your money
and only thinking of the current moment you also
need to think about the futuer
the same thing goes for saving you can'Correct your spelling
future
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save your money
until you die you need to balance you
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your
money
and I promise you that will be the best for you now and for your future self.Submitted by alaanoudaltammaami on
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has clear distinctions between spender and saver, but an introduction and conclusion would strengthen its structure.
task achievement
Try to explain your points with specific examples or scenarios. For instance, how a spender might invest in experiences, while a saver might prioritize financial security.
task achievement
Ensure that your essay clearly addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for spending and whether it is a positive or negative development.
task achievement
Your understanding of different mindsets towards money is clearly articulated.
coherence cohesion
The essay effectively raises the idea of balance between spending and saving.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite