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Band 6

You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but the Landlord won't return your deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter • explain why you are writing • ask for the return of your deposit • inform the landlord of possible legal action

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Dear Madam, I am writing to you to express my concern about the fact that unreturned ,refundable
deposit
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.As you know, I have paid
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deposit
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 in return for leaving the apartment in good condition. In Scope of that, I am seeking my $1000
deposit
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 return by
end
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the end
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 of
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 month. I conserved all the conditions in the unit and did not cause any damage to any furniture or any fixtures. Please see
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the attached pictures as evidence of
flat
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the flat
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 condition before I move in and
current
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the current
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 situation.
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, I noticed you a month ago , which makes the clause written in the rental agreement active about
deposit
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 return for my condition. Unless immediate action is taken to resolve
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, I am afraid I will start the legal procedures with my attorney. In line with the rental contract, I am aware of local laws that support tenants for
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 type of case. I would like to let you know how upset I am about
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 refundable security issue, hope you will try to overcome
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 problem before I start legal action. Kind Regards, Adam

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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure your letter has a clear structure with logical sequencing. Each paragraph should present a new point or idea for better coherence.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use greetings and closings that are appropriately formal for the context of a letter to a landlord about a serious issue.
Coherence & Cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on a single idea to ensure the reader can follow your argument and reasoning.
Task Achievement
Ensure your task is fully achieved by clearly stating your purpose, explaining your reasoning, and providing specific details relevant to the situation.
Task Achievement
Adopt a formal tone suitable for the seriousness of the topic and maintain this throughout the letter to convey professionalism and urgency.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refundable deposit
  • rental agreement
  • amicably
  • tenancy
  • diligently maintained
  • legal proceedings
  • inspect
  • wear and tear
  • withhold
  • non-compliance
  • promptly
  • documented evidence
  • liability
  • small claims court
  • tenants' rights
  • non-negotiable
  • deadline
  • escalation
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