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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting the five countries (
Brazil
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,
Egypt
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, Malaysia, France, and the USA) in the period of 15 years from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the USA and France remained popular choices for
people
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 to visit,
while
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Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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 had significantly fewer tourists arriving in the given period.
Additionally
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, an upward trend is noticed in tourism of all the nations. In 1995, the USA welcomed around 70m
people
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,
this
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 figure steadily rose afterwards, climbing up to 80m in 2000 and progressing steadily over the following years.
Similarly
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,
Egypt
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 had nearly 30m
people
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 enjoying its sights at the start, later
this
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 number dramatically increased, reaching 60m in 2000. Between 2000 and 2005, the figure for
both
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 experienced steady growth and eventually,
both
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 of them plateaued in 2010 at approximately 90m.
Furthermore
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, the figure for Malaysia remained relatively steady for the timeline, it reached its peak in 2010, totalling up to 45m travellers.
On the other hand
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,
Egypt
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 and
Brazil
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 experienced a similar pattern,
both
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 started with nearly 10m, and the numbers for
both
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 of them rose steadily. Interestingly,
Egypt
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 overtook
Brazil
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 with an additional 2 million
people
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 by 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words brazil, egypt, people, m, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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