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The maps below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps give information about
sports
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the sports
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 centre of the
university
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 and its present and
future
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 construction plan.
Overall
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 we can say that previously the
university
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 had quite a narrow area for students when it comes to the
future
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 it will have expanded. At first glance , in the present
time
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time,
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 the
university
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has consisted
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consists
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 of 6 aisles which are reception, 2 outdoor courts, half Olympic swimming
pool
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,
changing
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a changing
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 room ,
gym
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a gym
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 and seating
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 it will be added , sports shop , cafe , sports hall 2 dance studio and leisure
pool
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. One of the most stunning changes is the leisure
pool
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 because the
university
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 had 2 outdoor skirts on the north and west of campus after that they were removed and the leisure
pool
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 will be built
instead
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 of two courts.
Besides
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 pupils of the
university
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 did not have a venue for drinking something because of that the cafe will be constructed in the
future
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.
Moreover
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, 2 dance studios will be added in order for to students learn non-academic skills.
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, the gym was average extent
however
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 in the
future
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 it will be expanded.
Finally
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, we can deduce that changing rooms and seating
area
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areas
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 will
be remaining to stay
Wrong verb form
remain
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 on
the
Correct article usage
apply
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campus
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, future, pool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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