The maps below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps give information about

sports

Correct article usage

the sports

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centre of the

university

and its present and

future

construction plan.

Overall

we can say that previously the

university

had quite a narrow area for students when it comes to the

future

it will have expanded. At first glance , in the present

time

Add a comma

time,

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the

university

has consisted

Wrong verb form

consists

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of 6 aisles which are reception, 2 outdoor courts, half Olympic swimming

pool

changing

Correct article usage

a changing

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room ,

gym

Correct article usage

a gym

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and seating

whereas

it will be added , sports shop , cafe , sports hall 2 dance studio and leisure

pool

. One of the most stunning changes is the leisure

pool

because the

university

had 2 outdoor skirts on the north and west of campus after that they were removed and the leisure

pool

will be built

instead

of two courts.

Besides

pupils of the

university

did not have a venue for drinking something because of that the cafe will be constructed in the

future

Moreover

, 2 dance studios will be added in order for to students learn non-academic skills.

In addition

, the gym was average extent

however

in the

future

it will be expanded.

Finally

, we can deduce that changing rooms and seating

area

Fix the agreement mistake

areas

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will

be remaining to stay

Wrong verb form

remain

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the

Correct article usage

apply

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campus

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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, future, pool with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
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8Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

204 words

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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