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The map below is of the town of canterbury. A new school (s) is planned for the area. the map shows two possible sites for the school. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of canterbury. A new school (s) is planned for the area. the map shows two possible sites for the school. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows the
town
 of Canterbury and indicates two possible sites for a new school, marked as S1 and S2, with surrounding areas and features detailed.
Site
 S1 is located to the northeast of the
town
center
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, close to the main road leading to Sturry, which is 5 km away and has a population of 7,000.
This
site
 is in the countryside and near the university situated in the north-central part of Canterbury. Being near the main road provides good accessibility for
students
 commuting from Sturry and other areas.
Site
 S2 is situated to the south of the
town
center
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, along a main road that leads to Chartham, 7 km away with a population of 4,500.
This
site
 is within the
town
’s housing area, making it easily accessible for
students
 living in nearby residential zones. It is
the
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adjacent to the
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 zone in the
town
center
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, which might make it a safer location for
students
 commuting on foot or by bicycle.
Overall
, S1 is closer to the university and accessible for
students
 from the northeast,
while
 S2 is centrally located in a residential area, offering convenience for local
students
. The choice depends on prioritizing either regional accessibility or local convenience.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, site, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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