You are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite him/her to the party. In your letter: explain the reason for the party give the date and time of the party suggest what the classmate could bring to the party Write at least 150 words.

Dear Jay, I am writing
this
letter to invite you to attend the party which I am going to organise
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the next weekend. Because Devarsh has been feeling alone here and his
birthday
coming, it is a great idea to become part of his happiness which can make his
birthday
memorable. Because we have an exam on his
birthday
, I have planned to celebrate his
birthday
on the next day of his
birthday
which is 7th July and the party time would start at 7:00 P.M.
However
, I have arranged all the necessary things but, the only thing left are snakes and cooldrinks and please bring a card to play at
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the party. Looking forward to hearing from you. Regards, Ankit
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Grammar and Vocabulary
Overall, the letter successfully communicates the essential details of the party. However, pay close attention to the spelling and grammar errors. The term 'snakes' should be corrected to 'snacks' and 'cooldrinks' to 'cool drinks or beverages.'
Clarity and Style
To enhance clarity, consider rephrasing: 'It is a great idea to become part of his happiness which can make his birthday memorable,' to 'It would be wonderful to share in his happiness and make his birthday memorable.'
Writing Tone
The letter has a warm and inviting tone, which is appropriate for the context.
Task Achievement
All key details such as reason, date, time, and what to bring are clearly mentioned.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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