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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)
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The graph describes the number of enquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
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, it can be pointed out
from
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 the picture in
person
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 was the highest
while
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 by letter or email was the least at that time.
According to
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 the graph in
person
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 was started in minimal and jumped up over the 1800. In comparison, by telephone was maximum in January went down to 8000 in February, but
last
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 four months it increased up the 1400.
However
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, it was still below the
in
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in-person
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person
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 over the six-month period in 2011. It is
vivid
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evident
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 from the graph that, by letters and email were lower 800 in January and decreased it to 380. But in May and June, it stayed stable in 2011.
In addition
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, the most improvement belonged to the
person
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 period by telephone took the second place.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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