The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the shift in the percentage of market share among the three types.

The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the shift in the percentage of market share among the three types.
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The given two graphs show the cost of watching films among three types: cinema tickets, DVDs, and legal downloads between 2005 and 2011.
Overall
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, there was a huge increase in the legal download sector from
one twentieth
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to 56% in 6 years. In 2005, renting DVDs consisted of almost 60%,
however
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,
this
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amount declined to nearly a quarter by 2011. The cost of cinema tickets changed from nearly
one third
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one-third
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to approximately
one fifth
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one-fifth
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over these six years. Compared to the renting DVD segment, the percentage for going to the cinema decreased slightly—by only 18%.
On the other hand
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, renting DVDs dropped from 59% to around a quarter.
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