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You use public trasnport and have been facing issues. Write a letter to the public transport autoroties. In your letter include: why public transport is important to you what problem you face suggest what can be done to improve public transport

#trasnport #transport #autoroties #face
Dear sir/madam. I'm using
the
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public transport
due to
 the long period of my life here in Canada. I'm always
felling
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 comfortable and confident with the transport schedule, and there were still
the
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minor problems of
late
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 for a few minutes. But the
lust
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 week I was very
dissapointed
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disappointed
 in the work of your department. As you have to know, there are many connections
throug
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through
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rout
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 like train - autobus. Today I had an issue with
such
 a connection when one of the buses was rejected without any
announsement
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announcement
. I had
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truble
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trouble
in
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 my workplace because I was late,
moreover
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 I was
disprived
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deprived
 of my bonus. I think it's irresponsible
toward
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 your customers not to note
such
 a problem with the bus. I hope you will do your best to improve
this
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advice
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 you to try to
promulgate
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 the public transport customers about a problem in your department and get us to know what are you doing to solve
them
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Sencirely
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Sincerely
 yours, Anastassia
Submitted by anastasia on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph is focused on a single idea, it will improve clarity.
other
Check for spelling and grammatical errors to enhance readability.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the issue and suggests a solution.
suitable writing tone
The tone is respectful and appropriate for the context.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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