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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunhsine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and maken comparisons where relevant

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunhsine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and maken comparisons where relevant
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We are shown a graph and a table depicting respectively the average
temperature
 per month and average number of daylight hours per year in
London
, New
York
 and
Sidney
.
Overall
, New
York
 has the highest fluctuations
whereas
Sidney
 is more stable with regards to their
temperature
. In relation to the annual hours of
sunlight
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sunlight,
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 both New
york
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York
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 and
Sidney
 have roughly the same number which is more than two times the expected in
London
. It is
also
 clear, that the coldest city among those three is New
York
 presenting months with a mean of
temperature
 slightly above zero degrees. At the same
time
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time,
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this
 region has the hottest periods reaching up to almost thirty degrees.
Likewise
,
London
 presents a similar pattern,
however
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however,
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Sidney
 has
a
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an
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 inverse
temperature
 curve
due to
it's
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its
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 location in a different hemisphere.
Finally
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Finally,
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 the biggest number of yearly daylight hours is found in New
York
, followed by
Sidney
, with
London
 in the third place by a far margin.
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