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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
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The given graph represents the proportion of broadcast media
audince
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audience
audiences
through
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 the day in 1992.
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, television viewership reaches a
peak
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 in the evening,
whereas
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 listenership
were
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 higher in the morning. In the morning, around 6 AM, people who listened to
radio
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the radio
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 consisted of about 5%.
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 percentage increased steadily and reached a
peak
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with
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 approximately 25 per cent at around 8 AM.
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, radio listenership dropped gradually throughout the day by 20%. Television had fewer viewers in the early morning, with roughly 0% at 6 AM. Viewership increased gradually reaching 15% in the afternoon. The figure
of
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for
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TV
audince
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audience
audiences
 continued to rise in the afternoon,
reached
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 a
peak
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 in the
eveninv
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evening
 around 8 PM of approximately 45 per cent. After the
peak
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, viewership decreased steadily at
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night, dropping by about 5 per cent.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words peak with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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