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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph and table illustrate the average monthly
temperatures
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 and annual sunshine
hours
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 for three major cities:
London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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,
temperatures
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 in
London
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 and New
York
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 are low in the early months of the year, rising until July and
then
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 decreasing again by
December
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.
In contrast
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,
Sydney
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 experiences high
temperatures
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 at the beginning of the year, which decline until July and
then
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 increase again towards
December
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. In detail, New
York
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's
temperatures
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 range from around 5
°C
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 in January to a peak of approximately 30
°C
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 in July, before dropping back to around 5
°C
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 in
December
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.
Similarly
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,
London
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 starts with
temperatures
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 around 10
°C
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, reaching their highest in July and August, and returning to approximately 10
°C
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 by
December
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.
Sydney
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,
on the other hand
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, starts the year with the highest temperature of around 25
°C
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 in January, drops to the lowest temperature of around 15
°C
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 in July, and
then
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 rises again from August onwards. Regarding annual sunshine
hours
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,
London
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 receives the least with 1,180
hours
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,
while
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 both New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 receive over 2,000
hours
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, with New
York
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 slightly higher at 2,535
hours
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 compared to
Sydney
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's 2,473
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, hours, london, york, sydney, december, °c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • temperature fluctuations
  • range
  • significant differences
  • average number of hours of sunshine per year
  • highlight
  • relate
  • patterns
  • comparisons
  • major cities
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