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The table below shows the income and jobs generated last year by tourism in Canadian states and territories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the income and jobs generated last year by tourism in Canadian states and territories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates a work are generated the income
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 year by tourism in Canadian states and regions.
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, it can be seen that
businesses
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 in the tourism sector had highest the
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported a 40 % or more
decline
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 in
revenue
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while
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 the lowest was the
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported no change in
revenue
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.
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, All
businesses
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 had the biggest percentages of
businesses
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 that reported a 1 % to less than 40 %
decline
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 in
revenue
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,
on the other
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 the lowest was the
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported an increase in
revenue
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. Looking
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 charts in detail, the biggest
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported a 40 % or more
decline
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 in
revenue
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 was at 45, followed by the percentages of
businesses
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 that reported a 1 % to less than 40 %
decline
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 in
revenue
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 at approximately 39. And
then
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 the lowest was the
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported an increase in
revenue
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 and the
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported no change in
revenue
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. Regarding the Bart chart, the
percentage
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 of
businesses
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 that reported a 1 % to less than 40 %
decline
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 in
revenue
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 was at about 42 % and other items just under ranks 18-21 %.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words businesses, percentage, decline, revenue with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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