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Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days. Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school, while others think children should begin in secondary school. Discuss both sides and give your opinio

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 in technology, the education system has
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 revolutionised which eventually has changed the demands of
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 market as well. Knowing more than
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language
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 for communication is always good. Some people are of the opinion that new languages should be introduced earlier
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 others believe that
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 should be taught in secondary classes.
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an opinion
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. Introducing an idea or concept early always has its advantages.
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, adding any
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 their daily life will make it easier for young kids to internalise the lingo. Research has shown that learning any
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 at a younger age a actually easier for students, versus waiting until high school. In
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 of the South Asian households, 85
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 of them have a mother tongue than the official
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 of the country. It could be Punjabi, Sindhi or
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Gujarati
. They would not know how to write the script of it, but verbally every child is fluent. On the other side, getting to know a
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 at
secondary
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a secondary
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 level means
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 has made a conscious decision
of learning
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 it. Learning a
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fourth
language
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 not only expands your mind , but it sets the pace for a better lifestyle.
One
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 could
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score
 a meaningful position in the workplace, get
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into the
 college of your dreams,
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and connect
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 with people abroad among other things. Studies show that there are many cognitive benefits of learning a new
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 as increased memory,
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stronger
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 mental agility and improved multitasking skills. In conclusion, learning new languages has only pros in all facets of life. The decision of when to learn can vary from
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 the start, the better it is for
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grammar
Ensure precise grammar and spelling throughout the essay to avoid small inaccuracies (e.g., 'a actually' instead of 'is actually,' 'Gujrati' instead of 'Gujarati,' 'scrore' instead of 'score,' 'inntothe' instead of 'into the').
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Support your arguments with more precise and detailed examples to strengthen your points and make them more convincing (e.g., specific benefits of learning languages early in primary school).
argument
Make sure to fully explore the disadvantages or counter-arguments to provide a balanced discussion. This will help in presenting a more comprehensive analysis.
organization
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the discussion.
organization
The main points are logically structured and discussed on both sides of the argument.
content
The essay provides clear reasoning and explanations for the benefits of learning a foreign language at different stages of education.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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