The diagram below showthe coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below showthe coastal  village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate Seaville, where was the coastal village, in 2 various years( 1980 and 2010).
Overall
, The number of not only people who live in
this
district but
also
facilities for passengers has increased.
However
, it was crucial that the vegetation area
destroy
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be destroyed
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.
According to
the pictures, in the first year, we can see the equipment that travellers could use was a hotel, Holiday cottage, and tea room;
nevertheless
, in the
last
year the hotel was in
last
place, but the holiday cottage moved to near East bank, which was in the same place in 2 times, and tea room replaced by
restaurant
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the restaurant
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;
furthermore
, sound dunes, near the tea room, have been changing to the new hotel. The graphs demonstrate in 1980,
this
region had a big area which did not have anything near the river ;
thereafter
, in 2010, it was built a retirement village and boat club, that
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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in
Change preposition
on
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the river beach
, .
Change the punctuation
,
.
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In addition
, the woodland was altered to a golf course;
additionally
, in 2010, we can see a massive residential zone
instead
of an old holiday cottage and marsh.
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