The diagram below showthe coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate Seaville, where was the coastal village, in 2 various years( 1980 and 2010).
Overall
, The number of not only people who live in this
district but also
facilities for passengers has increased. However
, it was crucial that the vegetation area destroy
.
Wrong verb form
be destroyed
According to
the pictures, in the first year, we can see the equipment that travellers could use was a hotel, Holiday cottage, and tea room; nevertheless
, in the last
year the hotel was in last
place, but the holiday cottage moved to near East bank, which was in the same place in 2 times, and tea room replaced by restaurant
; Add an article
the restaurant
furthermore
, sound dunes, near the tea room, have been changing to the new hotel.
The graphs demonstrate in 1980, this
region had a big area which did not have anything near the river ; thereafter
, in 2010, it was built a retirement village and boat club, that was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
in
the river beachChange preposition
on
, .
Change the punctuation
,
.
In addition
, the woodland was altered to a golf course; additionally
, in 2010, we can see a massive residential zone instead
of an old holiday cottage and marsh.Submitted by maryamkazemi968 on
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