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Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages of this new approach?

There are loads of arguments about the information which is
technology
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 is used to teach
students
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. I strongly believe that
technology
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 is more helpful and
affective
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effective
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 for
students
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 when they want to get data immediately. There are some advantages of
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 new approach. One of them
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technology
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 assists
students
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 make projects in
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class, and
learn
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 significant information
for
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them
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.
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as
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 a result, using new
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 is a part of
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'
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Try to expand on your points to give more detailed explanations. For example, you can explain how technology helps students to make projects or find information quickly.
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Provide specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention software, apps, or online resources that students use for projects.
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Work on the overall structure of the essay. Start with a clear introduction, followed by body paragraphs that each focus on a single main point, and end with a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to link your ideas and make the essay flow more smoothly. This will help improve the logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Include a stronger conclusion that summarizes the advantages you discussed and restates your main point.
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You have a clear stance on the topic and you recognize the importance of technology in education.
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Your essay acknowledges multiple advantages of using technology in teaching, which shows a good understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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