In many parts of the world, there is not enough food for everyone. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
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days, Change preposition
These
most
of the world everyone does not have enough Change preposition
in most
food
while
others
keep diet
to be on form. Correct pronoun usage
their diet
This
essay will introduce what are causes for tham
and how can we solve Correct your spelling
them
this
problem in modern
world.
Generally, most of the Add an article
the modern
populations
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population
are
suffer from Unnecessary verb
apply
the
hungerness Correct article usage
apply
while
are so many reasons for them
.
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this
Firstly
sharing is the most important couse
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cause
course
to
the hungerness. Today some of the Change preposition
of
peope
get too much than Correct your spelling
people
others
so others
are little while
it is hard to explain Correct word choice
and
adn
find solutions for them. Our Correct your spelling
and
most
problem Correct word choice
biggest
when
we are getting Add a missing verb
is when
to
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apply
food
or products so our heart is to be ready to share who does
not have. Correct subject-verb agreement
do
People
does
not not to share who lives really far from them. Looking carefully around us will be helpful to find those Change the verb form
do
people
. For
example
most of the Add a comma
example,
people
go to the Hecc
and Correct your spelling
HECC
donait
lot of money for them Correct your spelling
donate
instead
of go
there Wrong verb form
going
give
the money who Wrong verb form
giving
is
poor in your Correct subject-verb agreement
are
counr
or so many children are dying from Correct your spelling
country
hungernes
in Somalia.
To solve Correct your spelling
hunger
this
problem the goverment
should make special programs in their country Correct your spelling
government
gow
can Correct your spelling
that
reduse
these problems. Correct your spelling
reduce
Who
Correct pronoun usage
Those who
has
huge Correct subject-verb agreement
have
budget
for living Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
they
should take Correct pronoun usage
apply
soem
family and Correct your spelling
some
sponsor
for their life specially for Fix the agreement mistake
sponsors
food
and daily product
. Fix the agreement mistake
products
Otherwise
we would observe unjustise prosses in Add a comma
Otherwise,
modern
and smart world.
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a modern
the modern
On the other hand
the goverment
has to have Correct your spelling
government
speacial
promont for those Correct your spelling
special
people
as
like Correct word choice
apply
gave
them free Change the form of the verb
giving
food
or provide
them with Wrong verb form
providing
field
where they can plant and feed their children. Fix the agreement mistake
fields
For instance
in
Azerbaijan has Change preposition
apply
special
program for poor Add an article
a special
people
especially who
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those who
has
not any Verb problem
do
apportnuity
. The Correct your spelling
opportunity
goverment
gave them free land and provided them with Correct your spelling
government
seed
. It Fix the agreement mistake
seeds
effected
to Correct your spelling
affected
reduce
employes in Azerbaijan.
All in allReplace the word
reduction
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,
food
for eveyone
and there are so many solutions for it too. Surely we have to want it. Mainly to think about Correct your spelling
everyone
others
who has
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have
Correct your spelling
no
not
Correct your spelling
no
food
and give them only 1 % of food
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their food
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