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You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. Write a letter to the library. Explain what has happened and tell them what you want to do About it

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Dear
Sir
 /
Mme
I'am
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I am
 writing
this
 letter to inform you
Sir
/
Mme
 that I borrowed some
books
 from
college
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the college
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library
.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately,
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 I have to go away to visit a sick relative and I cannot
return
 the
books
 in time. I want to explain
this
 problem in my letter.
First,
I
brrowed
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bought
fourth
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a fourth
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books
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book
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 about marketing
strategie
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strategies
strategy
last
 week. I have to
return
 these
books
at
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to
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the
library
 after one week. Exactly , the date of
return
 is May
2th
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2nd
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. I have 3 days to
return
 these
books
 to the
library
. If I don't
return
 them
in
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on
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 the date, I shall have a punishment
by
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from
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 the director of the
library
. And I shall not have the capacity to borrow
books
 for one
years
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.
Secondly
,
in
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this
 date, I shall visit my
grands-parents
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grandparents
 in
other city
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another city
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 than
when
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where
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 I live. The journey
for
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to
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this
 city will take 3 days and I shall rest with my
grands parents
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grandparents
 because
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the grand
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grand mother
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grandmother
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 is sick. Indeed, I
don't
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won't
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 be able to
return
 these
books
 on May
2th
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2nd
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. I shall
return
 them after 4 days. Exactly on May 6th.
Finally
, I hope gratefully,
Sir
 /
Mme
 to accept my
aplogise
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apologies
apologise
 for
this
 problem and I hope
Sir
 /
Mme
 to
permet
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permit
 to me the
return
of
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books
in
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 May 6th and I do not have a punishment for the administration. Yours faithfully Rabeb
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by organizing the paragraphs more clearly. For example, first explain the situation, then the problem, and finally your request.
coherence cohesion
Proofread to ensure consistency in tone and grammatical structures. For example, 'return' instead of 'return them in the date'.
task achievement
You have clearly explained your situation and made a specific request.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for the context.
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