The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions that result from this energy use

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions that result from this energy use
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The two pie diagrams
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information about the average energy usage of an Australian household, and the proportion of greenhouse gas emitted.
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, we observe that
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maximum amount of
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electricity is consumed for heating
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.
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, the percentage for cooling
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is the lowest.
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, the harmful gases that are emitted by water heaters
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very significantly high compared to refrigerators. On closer
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, it can be seen that, out of 100 units of energy, 42 units
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utilized for heating the house, and 30 units by water heater.
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, only 9%
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of
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was used by cooling devices, of which 7% was alone consumed by
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. Out of 100
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of
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greenhouse
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gases liberated, 32
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from electric water heaters,
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liters
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from Air conditioners.
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8% was from light bulbs, and 14% from
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the refrigeration
refrigeration
process.
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