The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions that result from this energy use
The two pie diagrams
gives
information about the average energy usage of an Australian household, and the proportion of greenhouse gas emitted.
Change the verb form
give
Overall
, we observe that that
maximum amount of Correct determiner usage
the
the
electricity is consumed for heating Correct article usage
apply
purpose
. Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
Conversely
, the percentage for cooling purpose
is the lowest. Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
Moreover
, the harmful gases that are emitted by water heaters is
very significantly high compared to refrigerators.
On closer Change the verb form
are
examintaion
, it can be seen that, out of 100 units of energy, 42 units Correct your spelling
examination
is
utilized for heating the house, and 30 units by water heater. Change the verb form
are
However
, only 9% was
of Unnecessary verb
apply
this
was used by cooling devices, of which 7% was alone consumed by fridge
.
Out of 100 Fix the agreement mistake
fridges
liters
of Change the spelling
litres
green house
gases liberated, 32 Correct your spelling
greenhouse
liters
Change the spelling
litres
was
from electric water heaters,Correct subject-verb agreement
were
3
Correct word choice
and 3
liters
Change the spelling
litres
was
from Air conditioners. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
In addition
to this
8% was from light bulbs, and 14% from therefrigeration
process.Correct your spelling
the refrigeration
refrigeration
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