Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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believe that having lots of money will give you the chance to help poor

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.In my view being rich is not everything or not a reason to be able to do good things.

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, in

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, we don't need to be super rich to do good things for

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with low salaries can do the Same thing with aut affecting themselves.

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, they Can save at least 2% of their own money for charity things. Doing that will make them safe and feel good because they did something positive to save other folk and themselves.

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, helping others will affect your life in a better way. Your life will be easy and more flexible

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, every single thing will improve as you want.

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, when you help someone even with a small amount of money that directly reflects on your feelings and you will be happy with them. In conclusion,

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can do everything positively or negatively even if they have less salary than others that will not stop them from doing what they want. So not being rich is not a big deal for most

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The essay attempts to provide a complete response to the prompt by addressing the idea that being rich isn’t necessary for doing good deeds.

Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

204 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

wealthy
financial resources
philanthropy
charitable organizations
donations
fundraising
support
initiatives
contribute
fulfillment
purpose
selfless
altruistic
prioritize
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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.