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The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.

The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.
The table provides detailed information about the utilization of
water
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 for domestic, agricultural, and industrial
purposes
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 by six different
countries
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 (Australia,
Canada
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, China,
Russia
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, Turkey, and the UK). All units are measured in metric cubes (
m^
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3).
Overall
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, it is notable that the amount of
water
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 used for domestic
purposes
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 was greatest in Australia,
whereas
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water
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 is used most for industrial
purposes
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 in
Canada
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.
Additionally
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, it is
also
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 worth mentioning that the figure for
water
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use
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 for agricultural
purposes
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 demonstrates the highest
figures
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 in the given graph. Agriculture requires the highest amount of
water
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 in all
countries
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. People in
Russia
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use
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 1863
m^
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3, being the highest in the graph,
while
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 people in
Canada
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 (1238) and Turkey (1482)
use
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 an average of 1350
m^
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3.
Next,
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the quantities of
water
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 consumption in other
countries
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 are not even close, averaging around 800
m^
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3. Industrial
water
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use
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 is the second most
water
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-demanding category, albeit in four
countries
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. Canadians and the Turkish show the highest
figures
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 in
this
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 regard, at around 800 and 700 metric cubes, respectively.
Furthermore
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,
although
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 Australians and the British display high
figures
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 too, at 276
m^
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3 and 398
m^
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3 in turn, they are not nearly close to the former ones. China and
Russia
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,
however
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, exhibit the lowest quantities of roughly 70 and 50
m^
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3. Domestic consumption of
water
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,
by contrast
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, is the lowest compared to the other two objects; Australia ranks first with 341
m^
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3, followed by
Canada
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 with 279
m^
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3.
Following
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this
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, the amount of
water
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 usage is almost 100
m^
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3 in
Russia
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,
while
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 that of
water
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 utilization in Turkey is 80
m^
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3.
Additionally
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, the other two
countries
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use
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 an average of 32
m^
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3 of
water
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, showing the lowest
figures
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, countries, canada, russia, m^, use, figures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • agricultural sector
  • industrial water use
  • domestic water consumption
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • disparities
  • efficiency
  • sustainability
  • government policies
  • managing
  • regulating
  • regions
  • factors influencing
  • comparative analysis
  • water resources
  • resource management
  • sector-specific use
  • data comparison
  • water scarcity
  • usage trends
  • conservation efforts
  • allocation of resources
  • water footprint
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