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Successful companies use advertisements to make more sales. What can make an advertisement effective? Do you think advertisements are a bad thing or a good thing for our society?

#companies #advertisements #sales #advertisement #society
Nawadays
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Nowadays
, many companies use advertising to
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increase
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sales.
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However
, advertisements
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astrong
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a strong
 impact on
people
 around the world. In
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explaining
 the
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effect
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 of what we see on
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socail
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social
 media.
People
 over the years
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come
 more
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 to be
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controlled
 by the
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different
 things that the big companies present to them.
For example
, some
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factories
 represent the same thing every time but with
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small changes that make no big
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difference
 in the
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manufacturing
 work.
As a result
,
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 will be some trust
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connection
 between the
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customer
 and the salesperson which will make them
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buy
 every single
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machine
 that
made
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 by
this
 company.
Also
, fast
food
 ads that
shows
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 on the
televion
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television
which
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make
people
 think that they will get the same meal.
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, most
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of
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 the popular
resturants
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restaurants
 represent the
food
 in a very good way with more things to make the
food
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 nice and perfect. But in
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real life when you order from them you
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find
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 that the
food
 is not the same. In
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conclusion
,
people
 should be more careful and
to
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think before
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 or
buy
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buying
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any thing
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anything
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 from
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television
 advertisements because most
of
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the
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companies are only
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focusing
 on how to
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sell
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 the products.
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