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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the outcome of the survey in three years ,in 2005,2010 and 2015 at McGill University.
To begin
 with, there are five different sectors
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 the results of 3 different years in percentage ,in teaching quality,library resources,Student Services,Range of modules offered and Sports and social facilities.
Firstly
, in 2005 the Teaching quality results were seventy-four per cent
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 in 2010 declined by 2 participants,but in 2015 the number of participants increased to 78%.Coming to Library resources which is the highest evaluation from all other sectors,in 2005 they got eighty-six
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 gradually increased in 2010 by 2%,but in 2015 they decreased by one per cent.
Thirdly
,the outcome in Student services was 54%,in 2010 and 2015 they gradually inclined up to 95%.
Moreover
,in the range of modules offered the lowest
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 was taken,in 2005 was thirty-nine
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 which decreased by 8% in 2010,but in 2015 became worse and
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went down by six per cent.The final section is Sports and social facilities which in 2005 ,2010 and 2015 was exactly the same, 65%.
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, the highest
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rating was in
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Library
 resources and the
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lowest
 was the Range of modules offered.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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