It is universally accepted that eating too much sugar has a negative effect on people’s health. Therefore, some believe that the government should control the amount of sugar people consume. Others think that it is the responsibility of an individual to monitor their sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Have you ever thought about eating too much
sugar
has a negative impact on human's
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human
health
.
Where some believe that the Change the punctuation
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government
responsibility Change noun form
government's
to
balance the quantity of Add a missing verb
is to
sugar
people
consume.Others think that it is personal
ability of Add an article
the personal
human
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humans
that
to control Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
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their
sugar
and pay attendtion
to the Correct your spelling
attention
ammount
of intake.
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amount
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,to begin
with,first of all,there are majority of citizens think that its Correct article usage
the governments
governments
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government's
governments'
responsibilities
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responsibility
people
to take care of there
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their
health
by monitoring there
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their
sugar
consume
.Replace the word
consumption
whereas
,on the other
hand
some Add the comma(s)
hand,
people
think that its individuals
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individual
bussiness
to look after Correct your spelling
business
there
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their
sugar
taking.However
there are studies going about how much Add a comma
However,
sugar
body
needs for daily Correct article usage
the body
rotin
.Correct your spelling
routine
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Moreover,
people
cant
avoid having Correct your spelling
can't
sugar
at all.Such
as,there are huge
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a huge
ammount
of Correct your spelling
amount
amounts
people
have
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who have
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problems,and the doctors told
them to be far from Wrong verb form
tell
the
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apply
sugar
and gives
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give
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them
the
plan
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a plan
the
daily diet, what to eat and what to not.Change the word
their
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the
there are many privet Correct article usage
apply
health
centers to do monthly check
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checks
up
and its very fundamental, but some Change preposition
apply
people
cant afford the docters
fees, Correct your spelling
doctor
due
to Correct word choice
and due
this
they avoid to go
to the Change the verb form
going
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frequent
up
.Change preposition
apply
In addition
, if 50% of citizens are rich but the remaining are poor,there are many catogaries
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categories
for example
,some works
as Fix the agreement mistake
work
cleaner
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cleaners
labour
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labourers
servent
,Correct your spelling
servant
working
in Verb problem
apply
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the garage
a garage
garage
,working as Fix the agreement mistake
garages
buss driver
, and Fix the agreement mistake
bus drivers
taxi
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a taxi
the taxi
driver
.Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
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there are some poor countries where they dont
have facilities at all , no hospitals, Correct your spelling
do not
clinics
to think about Correct word choice
or clinics
there
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their
health
.
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, the government built free health
centers
for the locals to Change the spelling
centres
do
check Unnecessary verb
apply
up
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apply
or
other Correct your spelling
on
health
issues.Furthermore
, there are many GYM's
to join and that will help Change noun form
GYM
the
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apply
people
to mantgain
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maintain
there
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their
body
and avoid diseases.Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
In recent
researchers proved that doing Change preposition
Recent
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a workout
workout
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workouts
healps
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helps
body
to improve.Correct article usage
the body
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,joining fitness
center and doing daily Add an article
a fitness
exersices
will keep your mind Correct your spelling
exercises
exercise
charp
and active,Correct your spelling
healthy
thats
gives you more healthier life.In some Correct your spelling
that
centers
trainers Add a comma
centers,
provides
food diet Change the verb form
provide
plan
as per the Fix the agreement mistake
plans
persons
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person's
persons'
health
reports, and its
free of charge.Proper diet and Replace the word
it's
it is
doing
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apply
workout
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workouts
everyday
will Replace the word
every day
make
you far from these Verb problem
keep
health
issues,like,high blood pressure,gaining over weight
,heart attack,Correct your spelling
overweight
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and knees
knees
infection.
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knee
experiance
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experience
i
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I
use
to play weighlifting for UAE national team,and its good to be healthy, Wrong verb form
used
i
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I
use
to go to Wrong verb form
used
gym
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the gym
everyday
and do workout more than 3 hours,but once Replace the word
every day
i
left its i Change the capitalization
I
start
to face problems and Wrong verb form
started
health
issues.
In conclusion, having huge
scale of Add an article
a huge
the huge
sugar
its
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is
dangurouse
to Correct your spelling
dangerous
health
and its
not Correct your spelling
it's
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a giovenments
giovenments
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government
resposibilities
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responsibility
and
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or
personal
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a personal
issue
.Fix the agreement mistake
issues
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