It is universally accepted that eating too much sugar has a negative effect on people’s health. Therefore, some believe that the government should control the amount of sugar people consume. Others think that it is the responsibility of an individual to monitor their sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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daily diet, what to eat and what to not.

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and its very fundamental, but some

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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negative effect on health
government control
sugar consumption
public awareness campaigns
excessive sugar
regulations
tax on sugary products
limits for sugar levels
manufacturers
accountability
freedom of choice
health implications
dietary habits
lifestyle changes
reading labels
healthier alternatives
self-regulation
personal accountability
external regulations
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Some people believe teenagers should focus on all subjects equally, whereas other people think that they should concentrate on only those subjects that they find interesting.

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