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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives details about the police budget in a particular area in Britain for 2017 and 2018 and pie charts illustrate where
money
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 is handed out at the same time and location.
Overall
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, the most budget was gotten by the National Government in 2017 and 2018 and the most
money
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 was spent on salaries in the two same years. As can be seen, in 2017 the total
money
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 that was dedicated to the Police budget was £ 304.7
m
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 which includes £ 175.5
m
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 from the National Government. In 2018, the amount of
money
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 that was given from Local Taxes was £ 102.3
m
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 which is £ 10
m
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 more than in the
last
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 year on the same source.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
money
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 that was distributed to Salaries decreased from 75% to 65% and 6% was put on Technology which reached
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14% in 2018.
Finally
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 amount of
money
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was
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handed out for Building and transport remained unchanged in 2017 and 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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