The chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the changes
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that occured
occured
in 3 various areas of Correct your spelling
occurred
crime
in Newport city centre between 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, burglary depicts the most figures in the crime
rate during the start of 2003 and robbery was the least problem caused.
With regard to burglary, it has the most in
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cases
during the beginning period. It started at 3400 cases
per year in 2003, at
which rose steadily with a digit of 3800 in 2004, Change preposition
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then
fluctuated with a rapid decrease to 1100 in 2008 and it reached at an amount of 1400 cases
at the
end
of 2012. Car theft was
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also
follows the
similar trend, in which it started with 2800 Correct article usage
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cases
per year in 2003 and maintained that level at the
end
of 2005, then
fluctuated until 2006 and then
rose slightly and reached 2800 at the
end
of period
.
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the period
In contrast
, robbery was the least crime
attempted and has
started at a rate of 800 Unnecessary verb
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cases
per year in 2003, then
fluctuated slightly upward and downward over the periods and reached at
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crime
rates at the
end
of period
.Add an article
the period
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