The chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the changes
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occurred
in 3 various areas of
crime
in Newport city centre between 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, burglary depicts the most figures in the
crime
rate during the start of 2003 and robbery was the least problem caused. With regard to burglary, it has the most
in
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cases
during the beginning period. It started at 3400
cases
per year in 2003,
at
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which rose steadily with a digit of 3800 in 2004,
then
fluctuated with a rapid decrease to 1100 in 2008 and it reached at an amount of 1400
cases
at the
end
of 2012. Car theft
was
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also
follows
the
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similar trend, in which it started with 2800
cases
per year in 2003 and maintained that level
at the
end
of 2005,
then
fluctuated until 2006 and
then
rose slightly and reached 2800
at the
end
of
period
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.
In contrast
, robbery was the least
crime
attempted and
has
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started at a rate of 800
cases
per year in 2003,
then
fluctuated slightly upward and downward over the periods and reached
at
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the exact number in
crime
rates
at the
end
of
period
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the period
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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