The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.
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sales
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four different types of digital Correct the article-noun agreement
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games
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games
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games
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games
, and Handheld Use synonyms
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, over a Use synonyms
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2006 indicated in billions of Correct word choice
and
dollars
.
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whereas
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dollars
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the Hanheld
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sales
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categories
games
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game
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dollars
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similar
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the
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dollars
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dollars
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was
slightly dropped.
From 2003 onwards, it is noticeable that the Change the verb form
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sales
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a handheld
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handheld games
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dollars
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whereas
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billion
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