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In modern society, ambition is more and more important. How important is ambition for being successful in life? Is it positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#society #ambition #life
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In
todays
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 world,
ambition
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 is perceived as something that
really
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 crucial.
Ambition
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 makes
people
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 know what to do in the future, either
their
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in their
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 career or personal
life
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.
Ambition
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 can make
people
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's goals more
celar
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clear
 and specific.
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, sometimes
ambition
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 makes human
do
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not enjoy their
life
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 because they are too
much
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focus
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 on their purpose in
life
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.
Ambition
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 is really important for someone who
are not know
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does not know
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 what they want to do in
this
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life
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.
Ambition
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 is like a direction to guide
people
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 to
be more
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realize how they
are seeing
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this
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 world. Having said that,
ambition
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 is essential to make a chance to
success
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succeed
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be
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bigger.
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, there is one teenager who really wants to get her dream university. But, she
is does
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 not have
ambition
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 on it.
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, it must be difficult for her to achieve it
due to
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ambition
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 can be
as
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a hope to pursue the dream. So,
ambition
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 can bring positive impacts to
people
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 who really like to
gain
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achieve
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 their dreams.
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,
ambition
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is
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does
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 not always spread
positiveness
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positivity
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 to
people
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's energy
while
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 they are still trying to
get
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achieve
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 their purpose.
Ambition
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 can
give
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put
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 pressure
to
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on
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human
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humans
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 since they feel it
as
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is
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 a burden. That burden is like a responsibility that must
bring
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be
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 to anywhere and anytime. To illustrate, students who want to get 100 points in their exam can force themselves to study 24/7 with less sleep and skip meals.
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,
people
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 must be aware of these negative impacts.
To conclude
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,
ambition
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 is a significant key to
lead
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leading
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people
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 to
being
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be
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 successful in
life
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.
However
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, there are some warning that indicates
people
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susceptible
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are susceptible
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 to the bad sides because of
ambition
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.
Hence
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, I highly
advice
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advise
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to
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apply
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people
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 to take the good sides
instead
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 of the bad sides.
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language
Work on refining your language and grammatical accuracy, such as subject-verb agreement (e.g., "someone who are" should be "someone who is").
examples
Include more varied and richer examples to substantiate your points. For instance, provide examples from famous personalities or historical figures to bolster your argument.
coherence
Ensure that your paragraphs flow logically from one to the next. While your essay is generally cohesive, greater use of connecting words and transition phrases could improve its overall coherence.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which nicely frames the discussion.
coherence
The main points are logically structured and easy to follow.
balance
You have addressed both positive and negative aspects of ambition, providing a balanced perspective on the topic.
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