The advent of the Internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Write an essay looking at the advantages and disadvantages of this professional arrangement. Share personal examples in your essay.
The internet plays an important role in our modern life.
This
advanced technology made Linking Words
possible
for workers to Correct pronoun usage
it possible
work
for international companies remotely. Use synonyms
This
advancement has brought more benefits Linking Words
as well as
some demerits that will be discussed in Linking Words
this
essay with my own examples.
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This
arrival of the internet brings more benefits to both employers and employees. The most obvious benefit is that any employer can Linking Words
acccess
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access
the
skilled employees from overseas Correct article usage
apply
whos
is Correct your spelling
who
perfect
fit for Add an article
a perfect
the perfect
ther
position they are looking for. Correct your spelling
the
their
For instance
, more than 70% of the IT sectors are Linking Words
hirinng
their workers out of the country Correct your spelling
hiring
that
allows them to Correct pronoun usage
which
work
from home. Use synonyms
Linking Words
While at
the same time, Correct word choice
At
this
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save
their time which allows the overseas Change the verb form
saves
labours
to Correct your spelling
labourers
work
for multiple companies Use synonyms
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
gives
ultimate benefits Change the verb form
give
for
both the owners and their associates.
Change preposition
to
However
, Linking Words
this
improvement in cyberspace made so many people lazy and Linking Words
introvert
Replace the word
introverted
that
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apply
affect
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affecting
the
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their
socially interact
with people in conversations. Replace the word
social interactions
For instance
, a good friend of mine got Linking Words
an
great Change the article
a
oppotunity
to Correct your spelling
opportunity
work
for a multinational company from his home Use synonyms
that
made him Correct pronoun usage
which
to
concentrate more on Change the verb form
apply
work
Use synonyms
that
leading a social life, which made him feel alone. Correct word choice
than
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Finally
the net has brought many mental health issues to an individual who Add a comma
Finally,
Use synonyms
work
alone in a private Change the verb form
works
sapece
Correct your spelling
space
on
their desired location.
In Conclusion, Change preposition
in
eventhough
the positive side will help in improving Correct your spelling
even though
company's
Correct article usage
the company's
finance
by selecting talented workers and Fix the agreement mistake
finances
allows
the public to do multiple Wrong verb form
allowing
task
. Change to a plural noun
tasks
Besides
that on the negative Linking Words
side
I can see that it Add a comma
side,
made
the person more Wrong verb form
makes
introvert
and affects the Replace the word
introverted
persond
mental health. Correct your spelling
person's
person
persons
Therefore
, the advancement of the net that pulled people to do remote Linking Words
work
Use synonyms
is having
both advantages and disadvantages.Wrong verb form
has
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grammar
Review your spelling and grammar. Small mistakes like 'whos' instead of 'who is' and 'ther' instead of 'their' can affect clarity.
content development
Ensure that your examples and points directly illustrate the advantages and disadvantages you mention. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point supported by relevant details.
coherence
Avoid repetition of ideas. For instance, mentioning mental health concerns twice in a similar context can be seen as redundant.
style
Try to vary your sentence structure. Using a mix of short and long sentences can make your essay more engaging.
structure
Clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which aids in reader comprehension.
content
Use of personal example adds a personal touch and makes your essay more engaging.
clarity
Purpose of the essay is clear from the introduction, setting a good tone for the reader.