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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries
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The column graph shows the proportion of expenditure on
food
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/drinks/
tobacco
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, clothing/footwear, and leisure/
education
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 in five various countries throughout 2002.
Overall
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, all the given nations spent the most on
food
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/drinks/
tobacco
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,
while
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 money
spent
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was spent
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 on entertainment and
education
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. In general, the amount of money spent on
food
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/drink/
tobacco
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 in Turkey, at 32. 14%, and Ireland, at nearly 29% accounted for the largest proportion, which was higher than any other
countries
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country
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.
In contrast
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, the percentage of expenditure for clothing/footwear in Italy constituted the largest portion, at 9%, significantly greater than the other four nations. Regarding leisure and
education
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, Turkey and Sweden were the largest consumers, at 4. 35% and 3. 22% respectively.
Initially
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, Swedish people
spend
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spent
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 the least on
food
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/drink/
tobacco
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, at nearly 16%.
This
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 trend can
also
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 be seen in the figure for clothing/footwear, at 5. 4%.
However
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, Spain had slightly higher numbers for these categories,
on the
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contrary
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 the lowest figure for leisure/
education
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, at only 1. 98%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, tobacco, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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