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The table shows data about underground railway systems in siz major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in siz major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
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The table illustrates information about
undergraud
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underground
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railway
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constructure
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construction
 in
London
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, Paris,
Tokyo
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, Washington DC, Kyoto,
los
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 Angeles in three categories.
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, it is clear from the table that
London
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 is the oldest one and
have
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has
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 the longest route
tham
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than
 others,
while
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Tokyo
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have
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has
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 the highest number of passengers per
year
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.
London
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have
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has
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 the oldest rail station
that
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apply
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built in 1863, at the same point Paris and
Tokyo
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 are the
owner
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 of the older
railway
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system
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 that
other
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others
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 in
this
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 table with constructed in 1900 and 1927, respectively.
London
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also
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have
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 the longest rail
system
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 at just under 400
kilometres
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.
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,
Tokyo
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have
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has
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 the most passengers per
year
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 with 1927 , following that Paris is second most in
this
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 category with
appproximately
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approximately
 1200 passengers per
one
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apply
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year
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.
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Moreover
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 Los Angeles has the
uyoumgest
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largest
 underground
railway
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system
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 opened at
year
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 2001 and Kyoto
has
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 the second
yong
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young
 rail station at the
year
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 1981.
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, Washington DC have the longest
kilometres
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 of route with 126
kilometres
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 ,
while
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 Kyoto has the shortest distance
railway
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system
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 at just above 10
kilometres
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, london, tokyo, year, system, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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