The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
The provided maps illustrate how West reduced.
Park
Secondary School
's lineup changed between 1950 to 1980 and 1980
to 2010.
Over the period, The Change preposition
from 1980
school
lost its green areas and some places enlarged
, removed and cut throughout these developments in Add a missing verb
were enlarged
school
.
In 1950, School
Correct article usage
the School
has
4 different parts which Wrong verb form
had
are
houses, Wrong verb form
were
school
, farmland and Correct article usage
a school
playground
. Houses and Correct article usage
a playground
school
are located Fix the agreement mistake
schools
in
the roadside. In 1980 with a restoration Change preposition
on
in
Change preposition
of
school
, three houses Correct article usage
the school
were remove
and they constructed a new car Change the verb form
were removed
park
and also
a science block. Also
the farmland has changed to a sports Add a comma
Also,
field
while
the playground
and the school
did not change.
In 1980, the playground
was the largest area of the school
as same as 1950
. In 2010, Change preposition
in 1950
Main
building and science block have not changed. Correct article usage
the Main
However
, Sports
Correct article usage
the Sports
field
and Fix the agreement mistake
fields
playground
Fix the agreement mistake
playgrounds
Add a missing verb
were
Therefore
, the car park
area expanded due to
new empty places from playground
and sports Add an article
the playground
a playground
field
. As a consequence
, car
Add an article
the car
park
was the biggest field
of the school
in 2010.Submitted by taylanpolat6124 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, playground, field with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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