Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative trend?
Nowadays, our world is changing rapidly, especially in technology
such
as smartphones, automation, robots, artificial intelligence, and so on. Linking Words
In particular
, mobile phones become one of the most vital things in our daily life. Not only Linking Words
teenagers
, adults or working age have their mobile phones but some Add a missing verb
do teenagers
children
Use synonyms
also
have access to Linking Words
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
Furthermore
, some groups spend their time every day in front of the monitor. So, there are some concerns and I will show the positive and negative Linking Words
points
of Use synonyms
this
behaviour.
Linking Words
Firstly
, There are some pros that people agree with these Linking Words
points
. Use synonyms
For example
, some Linking Words
parents
do not have time to stay with their kids, so they decide to give them a smartphone, wishing them fun and not lonely by watching some content from social media. Some fathers or mothers Use synonyms
also
believe that Linking Words
children
, who have their own Use synonyms
phone
, can call their Fix the agreement mistake
phones
parents
when they need some help or contact them in abnormal situations. Having said that, these kinds of Use synonyms
situation
provides a lot of positive Fix the agreement mistake
situations
trend
.
Change to a plural noun
trends
However
, on the flip of a coin, there are Linking Words
also
some negative Linking Words
points
including too much time spent and appropriate use. Use synonyms
For instance
, some sons and daughters Linking Words
Add a missing verb
are addict
addict
to watching content on their smartphones Replace the word
addicted
instead
of playing outside with their friends. Linking Words
This
will cause them to be an anti-social person. Some Linking Words
children
have aggressive behaviour when phones are away. Because of ignorance and control from Use synonyms
parents
, some groups tend to use their electronic devices for illegal purposes like porn, or crime. Use synonyms
Finally
, these can lead to terrible moments for them and their Linking Words
parents
.
To summarise, smartphones are one of the most innovative developments and highly helpful tools for every human. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, Linking Words
in
Change preposition
apply
children
, using devices have to be educated and controlled by adults with appropriate advice. Using with suitability will make a lot of positive Use synonyms
points
for both Use synonyms
children
and Use synonyms
parents
.Use synonyms
Submitted by matty10
on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to illustrate your points better. For instance, mention specific social media platforms or types of content that children might be engaging with.
coherence
Ensure that every paragraph is focused on a single main idea to improve clarity. For example, separate the idea of parental neglect and children's safety into different sections.
coherence
Work on sentence variety to enhance the flow of your writing. Use complex and compound sentences alongside simple sentences for better rhythm and engagement.
introduction
Your introduction effectively outlines the scope of the discussion and sets up the essay well.
conclusion
The conclusion provides a clear summary and presents a balanced view on the role of smartphones in children's lives.
task response
You have raised relevant points and provided a well-rounded discussion by addressing both the positive and negative aspects of children's smartphone usage.