Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?”
First of all,several
people
love to spend most of their lives living near where they were born.This
comes either from bloodline
or from the society where they used to live.Some prefer to spend the rest of their lives far from their townhouse or community.
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the bloodline
Firstly
, human nature adapted to live in the same environment or in the same culture,which doesn't let them move to other places.It is often that people
have some kind of six senses tell
them to stay in the same place rather than try new things.Correct pronoun usage
that tell
For example
, some people
are afraid of change, and to try to live in a different society.However
, in some countries, it might be safer to live in than another country because,(of corruption,political pressure,stability, cultural differences etc.).Furthermore
,people
working in government with stable incomes, businessmen, artists,and movie stars, prefer to live in their homeland rather than ordinary community as their income is already high.For example
, Bill Gates love
to Correct subject-verb agreement
loves
saty
in Correct your spelling
sit
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the Unites
Unites
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United
State Of
America and Correct your spelling
States of
its
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it's
quiet
big country Correct article usage
a quiet
comparing
to other Wrong verb form
compared
contries
.
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countries
Moreover
,there are some disadvantages to living far from the homeland.Because,they left everything behind,For instance
, friends,family,cultural food,and the atmosphere where they used to live.But some people
do not have opportunity
for a good income salary in their country, and Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
as a result
, they have to go abroad to look for financial stability to support their family.
Finally
, wherever people
feel safe they prefer to live there with peace of mind just to avoid problems, and they think priority about their children's future.Submitted by ismailalmarri0 on
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