Your friend has a travel company and would like you to come and work with him. Write a letter replying to your friend's offer. In your letter: •explain what you know about your friend's company •choose whether you accept or decline the offer •give reasons for your choice

#friend #travel #company #work #offer #•explain #•choose #decline #•give #choice

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Dear Gagan, I am writing

this

letter to appraise you my decision related to

job

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the job

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position you offered me. First of all, thank you for choosing me for

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the

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job posting of Customer service representative and I know you have a

renowed

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new

travel agency in Brampton which

is opened

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has been

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there since

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the 2000's

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2000's

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2000s

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Moreover

, it is opened by your grandfather.

Apart from

this

, your company's revenue is profitable and there is a policy to give fair wages and

bonus

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bonuses

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every year . Which really

impress

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impresses

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me.

However

, with

broken

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a broken

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heart

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heart,

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I'm not able to accept

this

opportunity

due to

my current job. I have a contract with them, if I break the contract for any reason I will

loose

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lose

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my funds

as well as

pension

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my pension

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plan. Which is a big amount in

actual

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actuality

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. Unfortunately, I can't accept it. But I know you will find

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a more

the more

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suitable person for the same. Hopefully,

this

letter doesn't make you angry

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about

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decison

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decision

. Best wishes for your search. Your buddy,

Hashn

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Hash

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task achievement

Your letter covers all the necessary points asked in the prompt, but adding more details about why you appreciate the company's policy on fair wages and bonuses can strengthen the response.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that your letter flows smoothly by using connecting words and phrases. For example, you can use 'Additionally' instead of 'Apart from this,' to sound more natural.

suitable writing tone

You followed an appropriate formal tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend about a job offer.

greeting and closing

You used a proper greeting and closing, which adds to the overall structure of the letter.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

167 words

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