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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarcric. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourits who visit such places?

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The table illustrates the number of people who speak one of the six most
wide-spread
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languages
 in the world.
In addition
 to
this
, it represents the
quantity
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 of persons who know one of these
languages
 as their second one.
To begin
 with,
it is clear that
 Chinese takes the first place as the language with the biggest number of native
speakers
,
as well as
 with the total number of
speakers
. In
a
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contrast, English has the majority of humans who learn it as a second language. In
this
table
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 Portuguese has the 6th place among all three table columns.
Moreover
, Arabic and Portuguese have almost the same
numbers
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number
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 of native
speakers
 and total
speakers
 in the world.
Overall
, it is obvious that some
languages
 are more popular among foreigners to learn
to
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,
whereas
,
other
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others
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 have huge numbers of native
speakers
.
However
, Mandarin Chinese
,
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 and Hindi
also
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languages
 with big numbers in both native
speakers
,
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 and
speakers
 as an additional language.
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coherence cohesion
Organize the information into clear paragraphs for better coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Provide more detailed comparisons and specific numerical data to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Review sentence structure for better readability and to avoid minor grammatical mistakes.
introduction
The essay begins with a clear introduction that outlines the contents of the table.
task response
The overall comparison of native speakers versus second-language speakers is effectively communicated.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.

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