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Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features

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The two pie charts illustrate the comparison between Japan and Malaysia
household
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 spending in five different categories.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that in Japan, the most
household
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 expenditure was
other
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on other
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 goods and services,
while
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 the lowest rate was spent
by
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on
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health
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care
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. In Malaysia, the housing sector made up the highest contribution to
household
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 expenditure, whilst
health
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care
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 became the
last
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 segment. In terms of Japan's
household
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 spending, the largest portion was allocated to other goods and services at 29%,
it
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 followed by the food sector contributed 24%. Interestingly, the figures for housing and transport were almost the same at 21% and 20%, respectively.
In contrast
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, the output from
health
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care
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 was the smallest at 6%. Regarding Malaysia's
household
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 expenses, the top three picks were Housing (34%), Food (27%) and Other goods and services (26%).
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, the contribution from Transport and
health
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care
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 were 10% and 3%, consecutively.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, health, care with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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