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The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#population #variation #three #wildlife #species #america #areas #information #features #comparisons
The line chart provides information
concernin
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concerning
 the wildlife proportion
in
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of
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 different
kind
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 of animals from the year 2011 to 2016. Generally speaking, it can be seen from the line chart that bears
was
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 the highest in 2026 with
number
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a number
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 of almost 200.
Converesely
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Conversely
 the rate of
Dolpphins
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Dolphins
 was the
least
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 in 2016 with zero figure .
As well
as
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Whales were in the middle between the number from 50 to 100.
Along with
 details, it is
clearly
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to say
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that the population
0f
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of
 bears in 2011
was
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dropped and ever since increased
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 a long period of time .
Furthermore
, the community rate of Dolphins
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 in the year 2012
with
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 150 after that it suddenly dropped to 0 in 2016.
Morover
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Moreover
, the society of Whales was changing and
unastable
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unstable
 and in
year
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 2013 we can see that the population
with
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 both Bears and Whales are the same with
number
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a number
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100
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of 100
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.
Also
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 it climbed up in 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population variation
  • wildlife species
  • coastal areas
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • year-by-year analysis
  • significant changes
  • species-wise comparison
  • influence
  • climate change
  • human activities
  • conservation efforts
  • natural predation
  • inland areas
  • population trends
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