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J. The table below shows the expenses of a used bookstore in Scotland for the first and last month of the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

J. The table below shows the expenses of a used bookstore in Scotland for the first and last month of the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
table
 illustrates the expenses of a
Scotland used
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Scotland-used
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 bookstore for
Junauary
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January
 and
December
for
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of
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 the same year.Well,there are a lot of notable things that can be observed.
Overall
,the most money which
were
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was
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 spent was on the
rent
 with nearly 3200$ in January and 4900$ in
December
 . On the one hand,maintenance ,
profeesional
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professional
 fees and equipment were the
lowst
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lowest
were
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at the bottom of the
table
 in
Junuary
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January
 and
december
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December
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.
Morover
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Moreover
,wages and benefits were nearly
equail
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equal
 to marketing in January
although
this
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apply
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in
december
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December
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 wages and benefits were higher with nearly
100$ diffrence
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100 difference
.
On the other hand
,we can observe that
rent
 was
in
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at
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 the top of the
table
 with approximately 3200$ in the first month of the year and 4900$ for the
last
 month.
rent
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Rent
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have
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has
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 the most of the
totall
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total
 expenses in both months.
Furthermore
,in
Junuary
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June
 utilities
was
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were
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 in
the
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apply
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second place
of
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on
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 the expenses
table
 with a huge
diffrence
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difference
 with
rent
the
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apply
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first.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, december, rent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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