The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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graph illustrates information about a

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proportion

of the

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population

of people who live in cities in 4 Asian countries between 1970 to 2020 with

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for 2030 and 2040 .Well, there are a lot of notable things that can be observed.

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,we can see that all the 4

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countries

have been increasing through the years without any

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. On the one hand,Malaysia

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the highest

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proportion

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had the

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highest

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from nearly 1991 to 2020.

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Philippines

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the Philippines

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had the

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highest

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population from the period 1970 to 1990.

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,from 1970 to nearly 1990 Malaysia and

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had approximately the same

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Thailand

and Indonesia had almost the same

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between 1970 and 2000 but after

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Indonesia had boosted up to be higher than Thailand.

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the prediction

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proportion

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Thailand

with a small difference between the both.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Single idea per paragraph

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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Many countries offer a free health care system to their citizens rather than relying on private health care. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a free system, and give your opinion.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain answer.