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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 graph illustrates information about a
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proportion
 of the
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population
 of people who live in cities in 4 Asian countries between 1970 to 2020 with
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 for 2030 and 2040 .Well, there are a lot of notable things that can be observed.
Overall
,we can see that all the 4
counries
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countries
 have been increasing through the years without any
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fluctuation
fluctuations
. On the one hand,Malaysia
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 the highest
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proprotion
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proportion
 and
also
 had the
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highest
percentage
 from nearly 1991 to 2020.
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Moreover
,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the
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highest
 proportion of
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the total
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 population from the period 1970 to 1990.
Furthermore
,from 1970 to nearly 1990 Malaysia and
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the philippines
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and
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had approximately the same
percentage
.
On the other hand
,
Thaliand
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Thailand
 and Indonesia had almost the same
percentage
 between 1970 and 2000 but after
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 Indonesia had boosted up to be higher than Thailand.
In
addition
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addition,
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 the prediction
proprtion
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proportion
portion
 of Indonesia is higher than the
percentage
 of
Thaliand
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Thailand
 with a small difference between the both.
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