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write a complaint about visa follow up by agents descrive the probelm

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to complain about the bad communication and
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 by my file agents,
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 to the poor follow-up for my VISA application. Particularly, when I have paid all my fees to get the visa.
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, I have paid for two courses, one for the
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 preparation exam and the other for job application preparation. Unfortunately, I got only one course, and the other course never received it. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Kind Regards,Ahmed ALostaz
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introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are present and clear, but the letter could benefit from a stronger conclusion or closing remark to reinforce the complaint and desired resolution.
relevant specific examples
Try to add more specific details and examples to make your complaint more compelling. For instance, provide dates when the payments were made or mention any attempts to follow up with the agents.
logical structure
Organize the paragraphs more clearly. For example, separate the issues about communication and follow-up from the issues about the courses purchased.
supported main points
Ensure all sentences contribute to the main points and avoid unnecessary repetition. This will improve the overall coherence of the letter.
complete response
Clarify what action you expect from the recipients of your letter. This will enhance the completeness and effectiveness of your response.
complete response
The overall task response is quite good, you have clearly stated the primary issues regarding poor communication and incomplete service.
clear comprehensive ideas
The main points are relatively clear and easy to understand.

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