Nowdays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
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is argue
that Change the verb form
is argued
people
tend to coose
to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or Correct your spelling
choose
organisation
. I completely agree
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agree on
agree to
agree with
this
situation.
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doing their business
, they
can promote their Correct pronoun usage
apply
business
on social media platform
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platforms
with
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at
low
cost. Correct article usage
a low
For instance
, nowadays, many poeple
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people
doing
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do
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shop" to sell their product Correct your spelling
big
such
as skin care product
or lessons about different Fix the agreement mistake
products
language
and skills. Fix the agreement mistake
languages
Then
, self-employed business
are under all Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
of
things Change preposition
apply
controlling
. Self-employed Replace the word
control
business
usually Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
is
one-man bands. They have not Correct subject-verb agreement
are
require
listening Change the verb form
required
anyone
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to anyone
such
as boss
and Correct article usage
the boss
mangers
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managers
order
. They can Fix the agreement mistake
orders
doing
any decision when they want and don't need anyone Verb problem
make
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to allow
allow
. Correct pronoun usage
allow them
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, self-employed
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the self-employed
business
usually Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
have
not fixed working Add a missing verb
do have
time
. They can arrange the working time Fix the agreement mistake
times
according
the schedule. Self-employed working mode Add the preposition
according to
are
flexible working mode, low cost and free to Change the verb form
is
expenience
doing boss. Correct your spelling
experience
That is
the reason of people
choose to be self-employed.
However
, the disadvantages
of being self-employed Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
that
they may not adopt working with others if they do Add a missing verb
is that
other's
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other
job
requiring Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
cooperate
with others in the future. Self-employed Replace the word
cooperation
business
let them Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
to
control anything but it is totally different from an Change the verb form
apply
organisation
. An organisation
are
always discuss and Unnecessary verb
apply
figure
out the solution together. Correct subject-verb agreement
figures
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point maybe let
self-employed Wrong verb form
may be
people
can not adopted
.
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adopt
be adopted
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, self-employed
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a self-employed
business
let
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lets
people
feel experienced to be
a boss, Change preposition
in being
flexible
working time and lower Add a missing verb
have flexible
business
or marketing cost
. These are reasons Fix the agreement mistake
costs
people
choose to be self-employed. On the other hand
, people
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to work with Add a missing verb
are unadopted
group
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the group
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in
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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