Many people think that students should be given homework every day. Others this that it will give them under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Education
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system has improved a lot in the
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fifty years.
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these
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some people believe that keeping children under constant pressure helps them in
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the study
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and eventually
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them in achieving
thier
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their
life
goals
,
while
many
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argue that
this
may cause mental issues in children at an early age.
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essay will discuss both aspects of education with reasoned examples and provide a personal opinion in the conclusion.
To begin
with,
proponent
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proponents
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agues
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argue
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based on
the
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organisation,
task
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and task
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management
skills
that
student
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students
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can
achive
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achieve
by focusing more towards their
goals
and completing their daily
homework
.
In addition
, Many teachers and parents
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a
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best way to keep them in check.
Moreover
, Several
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claims that it allows
students
to focus more on their personal development rather than getting themselves
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negatively
influenced by other things that might affect their abilities to reach their
life
goals
.
On the other hand
, critics
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argue
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based on the
life
skills
that
students
may be able to learn because of daily
homework
.
Life
skills
such
playing
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as playing
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with friends and taking part in other curricular activities
allows
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allow
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them to build teamwork, creative, and cognitive
skills
which can only be learned by interacting with people and things around which can never be achieved by just focusing on studies and
homework
.
In addition
, giving
student
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students
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homework
daily can
also
cause
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negative
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a negative
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influence by causing mental
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conditions
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such
as anxiety, depression and panic
attack
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attacks
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.
Moreover
, having mental health
issue
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issues
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affects an individual abilities to
get
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complete
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a
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assigned task
complete
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. In conclusion, giving
students
homework
daily may support them and allow them to focus more on their
life
goals
but
this
approach may
also
hamper
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from
leaning
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learning
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life
skills
which are
neccessary
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necessary
for everyone to survive and make better and stronger
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connections
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with their communities. I believe a balanced approach is required, which will help
student
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the student
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to achieve their personal
goals
and sustain
students
from getting mental health
issue
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issues
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.
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