The line graph below shows changes in the amount and types of fast food consumed By Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line  graph below shows changes in the amount and types of fast

food consumed By Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The line graph compares the
amount
of junk food that was consumed by adolescents over the given period of 25 years. In general, the
amount
of foods
such
as pizza and hamburgers increased over the given period. There was a significant decrease in the popularity of fish and chips. Regarding fish and chips,
initially
in 1975, the former was the most consumed junk food around 100 grams) in Australia. In 1985, junk food reached a low of approximately 90 grams and
showed
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dramatically dropped to just under 40
gr
in 2000. Between 1975 and 2000, products
such
as pizza were the least consumed foods in 1975.
However
, in 1985 , it overtook the figure of fish and chips with 90
gr
and remained relatively stable for the whole
of
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period.
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clear that, the
amount
of Hamburger started the
amount
just under 15
gr
in 1975. And it rose rapidly from 1975 to 1985 and
peak
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at about 100
gr
in
2000s
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the 2000s
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