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The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart indicates how many watchers which are in the three various categories visited a
museum
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 over a fifteen-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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 was adult.
However
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,special exhibition
visitors
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 did not tend to meet the
museum
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 over the period. In 2007,precisely 400,500
of
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adult
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adults
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prefered
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preferred
 to visit the
museum
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 (which was the highest proportion of
visitors
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 over the period),just ahead of the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who were
adult
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adults
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 with 380,000
people
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 in 2012.
Moreover
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,visiting the
museum
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in by
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adults in 1997 was as popular watching
this
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museum
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 in 2002 with 300,100 and 302,200
visitors
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,respectively. In 1997,the
number
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 of
people
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 who were special exhibition
visitors
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 to watch the
museum
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 was only 28,000.(Which was the least
number
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 of
visitors
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 over the whole year).Whilst,42,000
of
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people
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 liked to visit the
museum
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 which comprised
to
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special exhibition
visitors
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 in 2012.
In addition
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,120,000
of
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visitors
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 who were aged under 15
met
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visited
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 the
museum
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 in 1997,compared to the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited the
museum
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 in age under 15 years old in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, number, visitors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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