A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/ She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Hey, my dear friend, I hope
this
letter find
you well.
I was very glad to get your previous letter, in which you asked me about my previous camping holiday. What can I say - I Change the verb form
finds
had
experienced a lot Wrong verb form
have
in
Change preposition
of
this
kind of edvertisement
, and I like it so much.
First of all, you have to know that it has cons and pros. The significant part of your holiday you are Correct your spelling
advertisement
advertisements
outdoor
, excited to see all the beauty of nature, to swim in Replace the word
outdoors
a rivers
and Correct the article-noun agreement
rivers
a river
a
lakes, cooking to yourself on an open fire. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
This
kind of rest give
you the best opportunity to be with your family, and your children would like it so much. It was a part of Change the verb form
gives
advantages
.
Correct article usage
the advantages
Furthermore
, there are some disadvantages. All of the pros that i
wrought in the first partChange the capitalization
I
,
have an opportunity to reverse into the cons. Remove the comma
apply
It
would be a lot of nature around you, but neither a supermarket if you need something, nor Correct pronoun usage
There
hospital
if you are not feeling good. Correct article usage
a hospital
But
Correct word choice
On
on the other hand
, we are living in developed
country, and there are many hospitals and shops, you just need to have a plan Add an article
a developed
for
Change preposition
in
a
case of unforeseen circumstances.
Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, me
and my family are very interested to Change the pronoun
I
injoy
you in your adventure. If you don't mind, let me know, please.
Best regards, Anastassia.Correct your spelling
enjoy
Submitted by anastasia on
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coherence and cohesion
Try to maintain consistency when discussing the pros and cons. For instance, mentioning specific disadvantages directly after discussing the advantages would help in maintaining a clear structure.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, as the letter has some minor errors. For example, 'edvertisement' should be 'advertisement' and 'injoy' should be 'join'.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for addressing a friend, which is perfect for this task.
coherence and cohesion
You provided a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages, which ensures a complete response to the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is mostly clear, making it easy to follow for readers.