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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/ She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Hey, my dear friend, I hope
this
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 letter
find
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 you well. I was very glad to get your previous letter, in which you asked me about my previous camping holiday. What can I say - I
had
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 experienced a lot
in
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this
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 kind of
edvertisement
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advertisement
advertisements
, and I like it so much. First of all, you have to know that it has cons and pros. The significant part of your holiday you are
outdoor
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, excited to see all the beauty of nature, to swim in
a rivers
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rivers
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 and
a
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lakes, cooking to yourself on an open fire.
This
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 kind of rest
give
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 you the best opportunity to be with your family, and your children would like it so much. It was a part of
advantages
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.
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, there are some disadvantages. All of the pros that
i
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 wrought in the first part
,
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 have an opportunity to reverse into the cons.
It
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 would be a lot of nature around you, but neither a supermarket if you need something, nor
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 if you are not feeling good.
But
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on the other hand
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, we are living in
developed
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 country, and there are many hospitals and shops, you just need to have a plan
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a
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case of unforeseen circumstances.
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,
me
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 and my family are very interested to
injoy
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enjoy
 you in your adventure. If you don't mind, let me know, please. Best regards, Anastassia.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to maintain consistency when discussing the pros and cons. For instance, mentioning specific disadvantages directly after discussing the advantages would help in maintaining a clear structure.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, as the letter has some minor errors. For example, 'edvertisement' should be 'advertisement' and 'injoy' should be 'join'.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for addressing a friend, which is perfect for this task.
coherence and cohesion
You provided a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages, which ensures a complete response to the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is mostly clear, making it easy to follow for readers.
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