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Some people think they newspapers are the best way to get news. However others believe that other media are better source of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals are of the view that other
media
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 are the better root for
news
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.
However
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, some individuals believe that the best way of getting
news
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 is through
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the newspaper
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. The essay will discuss both
views
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 and give the writer's opinion.
To begin
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 with,
due to
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 the advancement of technology, the
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media's
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 are
great
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a great
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 source of
updates
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 and
information
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.
Such
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 as the
radios
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radio
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, television,
social
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and social
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media
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handle's
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handles
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 ( Facebook, Twitter and others). One can listen to
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news
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the news
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 when driving or working at the same time. The is no need to park or pause whatever you are doing and to read papers and it's convenient too. Another point is reading
information
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 on
media
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 can give you
the
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apply
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access to
read
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other
people
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's
opinion
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opinions
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 and suggestions. Their
views
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gives
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 you
clear
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a clear
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 understanding
about
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of
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 the whole issue.
On the other hand
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,
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 from
newspapers
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lacks
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 reader's suggestions and comments.
Due to
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lack
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the lack
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 of space on the paper,
people
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's
views
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 are not documented which makes reading boring. Another point is,
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updates
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that updates
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 from
newspapers
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 are genuine since the
information
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are
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 revised by the authorities before publishing them.
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, daily
graphic
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graphics
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 in
Ghana
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the Ghana
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 auditor team read and
revise
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 the
information
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 for errors and any grammar mistakes before publishing them
out
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apply
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. Another point is
the
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that
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newspapers
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 could be kept and serve as a reference for future use.
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, in 1954 , a story about communication was published by the German
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 and it's surfacing today as a reference tool to what the author said. To add up, most
people
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 feel
boring
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 when reading from papers because of how huge and the kind of grammar being used.
To conclude
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, getting
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 from
newspapers
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are
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 free from grammatical errors, they serve as a form of reference and
no
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 adequate space for suggestions.
Whereas
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news
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 from
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media's
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media is
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are
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convenient,
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people
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views
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 are shared.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure tighter connections between ideas and smooth transitions between paragraphs.
task achievement
Develop your main points more fully with detailed, specific examples and explanations.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and phrasing to avoid small errors, such as incorrect agreement and possessives.
organization
The essay provides a structured discussion of both views and offers a clear personal opinion.
organization
The introduction and conclusion are clearly presented, laying out and summarizing the main points effectively.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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