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"In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. "

#countries #children #rules #behavior
Growing
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 process of children
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importance
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 in
world
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the world
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. The teaching method of
behaviours
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firstly
 impact on children,
then
 society. If children are educated in
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healty
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healthy
health
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 situation will affect
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other people and society well . In
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the opposite
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 way, if a child
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 under pressure through strict rules during
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 learning process of acts in life, it may cause
spreading
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the spreading
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 of unhealthy
behaviours
 between people.
For
this
 reason, a child should be educated in
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healty
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healthy
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Chrildren
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Children
 are not allowed to do everything. But
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, there should not be so strict rules for them. Because it can
make
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 opposite effects from awaited
behaviours
. Balance is important when making
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a list
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 of rules for child
behaviours
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task achievement
You need to ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the question. You should explain to what extent you think children should follow rules and provide clear, specific examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas need to be more organized. Start with a clear introduction that outlines your main argument, followed by well-organized body paragraphs that each focus on a single point. Conclude with a summary of your main points and a restatement of your position.
task achievement
You presented a balanced view on the topic, recognizing the importance of both discipline and freedom in child rearing.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and central argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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