Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However others believe that other media are better source of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals are of the view that other
media
are better root for news
. However
some individuals believe that the best way of getting Add a comma
However,
news
are
through the newspaper. The essay will discuss both Change the verb form
is
views
and gives
the writer's opinion.
Correct subject-verb agreement
give
To begin
with, due to
the advancement of technology, the media
are a great source of news
and informations
. Change the wording
information
pieces of information
Such
as radio, television and social media
handles (Facebook, Twitter and others). One can listen to the news
through radio station
when driving or working at the same time. There is no need to park or pause whatever you are doing to read papers and it's convenient too. Another point is reading Fix the agreement mistake
stations
news
on
Change preposition
in
media
can give you access to other Correct article usage
the media
people
's opinions and suggestions. Their views
give you a clear understanding of the whole issue.
On the other hand
, updates from newspapers
lack readers
suggestions and comments. Change noun form
readers'
reader's
Due to
the lack of space on the paper's
. Change the noun form
papers
paper
People
's views
are not documented which makes reading boring. Another point is that updates from newspapers
are genuine since the information is revised by the authorities before publishing them
. Correct pronoun usage
it
For instance
, daily graphics in the Ghana auditor team read
and revised for errors and any grammar mistakes before publishing them. Another point is that Add a missing verb
are read
newspapers
could be kept and serve as a reference for future use. For instance
, in 1954 a story about communication was published by the German Times and it's surfacing today as a tool for reference to what the author said. To add up, most people
feel bored when reading from papers because of how huge and the kind of grammar being used.
To conclude
, getting updates from newspapers
is free from grammatical errors, they serve as a form of reference and have no space for suggestions. Whereas
news
from the media
is convenient, people
's views
are shared.Submitted by priscillaagyeiwaaboahen on
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task achievement
1. Improve Grammar and Vocabulary: There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "better root for news" should be "better source of news." Consider revising sentences for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
coherence cohesion
2. Strengthen Introduction and Conclusion: The introduction and conclusion can be more engaging. The conclusion should clearly summarize the key points discussed.
task achievement
3. Provide More Specific Examples: The essay could benefit from more specific examples that further illustrate your points. For instance, mentioning specific news events that were effectively covered by radio or TV.
task achievement
1. Balanced Discussion: Your essay discusses both views thoroughly, providing a balanced analysis of the topic.
coherence cohesion
2. Logical Structure: Your essay follows a logical structure, moving from one point to another coherently.
task achievement
3. Relevant Points: You've raised relevant points to support each side of the argument, which strengthens your analysis.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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