Global warming is one of the biggest threats human face in 21 st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

Global warming is one of the most pressing
issue
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facing our planet today,
moreover
,
consequences
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the consequences
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of a warming
climate
are becoming increasingly evident, with rising temperatures. In
this
essay, l will attempt to shed light on the
problems
this
trend gives rise to
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and will propose some rational solutions to overcome
this
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challenges. Undoubtedly, there are two obvious
problems
resulting from air pollution and
climate
change. First of all,the process by which the Earth is getting hotter,
as a result
of
greenhouse
effects-
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in
particular
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the increase in carbon footprint in the air.
Besides
that, more factories
produces
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essential needs ,regarding as limitation of a manufacture. It is
also
worth mentioning that
greenhouse
gas emissions are growing day by day and ozone layer depletion contributes to
rise
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the rise
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in global warming. Cities have already
detrimined
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determined
the
climate
.
For instance
, urban
needs
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more commodities. Factories and cars that produce
a
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fumes and smoke,
while
other countries cut down forests for agricultural lands. Fumes are the massive pollution that
cause
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a
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climate
changes
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. Meanwhile,
climate
changes can
have
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devastating
on
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communities,causing loss of life, destruction of property and displacement of populations. Rising
in
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temperature
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temperatures
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and
percipitation
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precipitation
can affect agricultural productivity, leading to food shortages and price spikes. Rising sea levels threaten coastal communities and
infrastruture
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infrastructure
.
However
,certain actions could be
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the
problems
above. First and foremost, investing in renewable
energy
sources
that
makes
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to help decrease the carbon footprint. But we had better cease our reliance on fossil fuels, which are
primary
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the primary
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source of
greenhouse
gas emissions.
This
can be achieved through policies that promote
energy
efficiency, encourage the use of renewable
energy
sources
such
as solar and wind power, and support the development of electric vehicles. These natural
sources
are all clean
sources
of
energy
that do not produce
greenhouse
gas emissions. By transitioning to these renewable
energy
sources
, we can reduce our reliance on
fodsil
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fossil
fuels and decline our carbon footprint. By the way, people find more jobs
within
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volunteers and flourishing everywhere that
expanding
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the forests. Governments impose some
restriction
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restrictions
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about
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trafic
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traffic
jams
that
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so that
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citizens
should
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utilize bikes, electric cars and on foot. In a nutshell,
however
threatening the
problems
are, they can be resolved or, at least, lessened by taking all the necessary steps to mitigate the issues.
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language
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors such as verb agreement and sentence structure. For example, 'urban needs more commodities' should be 'urban areas need more commodities.'
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow between sentences, and ensure each point clearly and logically follows from the previous one. This can be done through better use of linking words and phrases.
task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that you provide specific examples to support your points. The more specific the examples, the stronger your argument.
task achievement
The essay addresses both problems and solutions, making a complete response to the task.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the subject matter, including references to renewable energy and carbon footprints.

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